Meatball goes to the chocolate factory
One day Meatball went to the small chocolate factory. It was a sunny day.Then Meatball saw a big giant egg in a red wrapping paper. He really wanted to eat it. But the security man said no because it was the only one in the world.
Hello,Maeve. I like your short story. How did you come up with the name meatball?Do you think meatball,might try another way to get to the big giant red egg?-Leanne
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ReplyDeleteI like your story about the meatball that goes to the chocolate factory. I like how you used words such as 'big, giant and red wrapping paper' to describe what the egg looks like.
Was this egg a special kind of egg? I wonder what will happen next in the story. Maybe you could write another chapter. It will be interesting to see if the meatball could get the egg.
Courtney
Hi Maeve. You have me intrigued. I want to know more. This is a good story and it makes the reader have more questions like is Meatball a meatball or a dog or a person? Will the sun melt the chocolate? Will Meatball get to eat the egg in the end? Wow so many questions. Do you think you could write a bit more? I love your characters.
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